Reflecting on the morning dew
and smiling on the sea,
the sun arises, dawning
and sees me, `neath the tree.
It only seems a lifetime
since the ground was rent for me,
flowers dropping by the petal
I approached eternity.
V
c2005, Deabler, V.T.
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Your gifts continue to bless us all. Keep writing writer man!
Love this V, but ...
eternity can be a very long time, right?
*** Coy ***
Wow! I'm speechless! Sounds like an out of body experience.
Sweet, sad, and cosmic. Makes me think a little of Emily's "A fly buzzed when I died." You have great allusions to the life/death experience--the dew, the sea, the sun, the tree, the flower petals. I love tree symbolism--practically every people has had myths and stories related to the tree.
I just love to read what you write. judi
Ah, Vince, what a lovely way to start my day. Love it. HUGS. *Barb*
There is a sad and dark thread that weaves its way through your writing my friend. Powerful.
Once again a beautiful piece.
Monica
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Is the feeling a young person experiences when approaching adulthood for the first time? And it seems time is an enternity then? That's what I get from it. Very moving. :) ~V
This is beautiful, Vince. My kind of "eternity."
I like this one. "ground was rent for me"... How true. L, Jenn (will catch up on reading the story when I catch up on WORK) :( L, Jenn
{{{{{Vince}}}}},
Have you ever published a book of your poems?
Vivian
Is Eternity a place or a time or both? Intriguing poetry, Vince. Thanks for stopping by my Journal! Hope all is well with you!
Best wishes,
Debi
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