Alone, circular thoughts demand attention.
The world, filled with sadness and despair
Drives us to earlier worlds
and engages our attention
to the futility of life.
Feeling worthless and humbled,
the razor is inviting.
c 2004 Deabler, V.T.
James 28 is posted.
23 comments:
deep poem! And it looks like that vampire has slipped past them again huh.
I think I've had those moments myself.
Monica
I think we all have those moments when we can't see the point to existence and to that degreee I identify with your poem. It's interesting to me that the last few days I've read a couple of journalers expressing exactly the same feelings as you've written about here.
Excellent poem, Vince.
Vince, love the poem. I really do think of you as "Mr. Cheerful," so reading this provides me with a new insight into you...
No! Never inviting. Too messy! ; ) I hope this isn't a reflection of your mood. If so, "snap out of it" (Cher in Moonstruck).
Beautiful poem, but the razor is never an option! :-) ---Robbie
This is to deep and sad for me to appreciate in any way. Hope your not self abusive. Lets get back to more upbeat poetry. Have a good weekend.
Dawn
The words are beautifully pulled together, but i hope that you are wanting to shave. ~Holly
{{{{{Vince}}}}} the title of the poem did not prepare me for its text or mood. My ex-husband liked to say "Everyday isn't Christmas" (perhaps that was the English translation for some Nigerian proverb)...but anyway none of us is always upbeat so as hard as it is to imagine you in a dark mood, I hope that if this poem does reflect where you were at the time it was posted, I hope that moment has passed.
Vivian
You write so beautifully. I just hope the mood hasn't lasted.
Vince? This needs serious attention, please call for help. We're around if you need to talk. You've a lot of support ask for the help you need. You are not alone. We're here for you love. Be thinking though as well, professional help is only a phone call or two away, or a trip to the nearest ER. Please choose carefully ... Our love, Ayn and all
I`m so deeply moved by everyone`s comments. I feel that I should let everyone know that this is poetry. I`m doing fine!
I think these are universal feelings, at some level, and I just felt the need to write one way of looking at it!
guess most of my poems are `bout extremes, love or death.
Anyhow, thanks for the comments, you don`t know how deeply appreciated you all are! I am sincerely moved by your concern.
V
{I Get it} Sometimes a pote is just a pote.
That's the Advantage of Bouncing in late to
Artistic Expression. Over=more, who else
can post such Historical/Gothic overtones?
[with Paintings?!] lata
Thanks, slac
GEAT entry!!!! BEAUTIFUL writing...I enjoyed this immensley. Sweet Poetry my dear V.
Heather~
Very nice, I like this one.
Carol
I love this poem...I can relate. It's all about choices!
You know, you had me there for a sec. I was about to hunt you down online. But from the title of the entry and then seeing the comments below I realize that you're jsut excercising your creativity with the poem and it doesn't really reflect your mood at all. :-) Great poem!
I have to admit...I WAS FREAKED OUT ABOUT THIS ONE !! THen I read the other comments and realized I wasn't the only one who thought that way ! I was hoping you were just going to SHAVE !!!!! lol
Stacy
Hi,
You had me scared too and then I finally caught on. You are a very good writer.
Anita
thanks for inquiring about my little savage. his appetite is still great - he is venturing outside more often, and he started sleeping with me again - so perhaps he was just in a snit about something. i continue to watch him, and will get him to the vet for a check-up soon, as much as he hates it.
Hmmm My comment wont be any different from anyone else but the hell with it.Your writing has feelings which brings the best out of your poem.That is true talent and may I applaud you on that.
Blessed Be
-Ema'lee
I love this one. I think it a frightening and necessary thing to be able to step towards thoughts in life that are both unconventional and unacceptable in order to convey what we are trying to portray. C. http://journals.aol.com/gdireneoe/thedailies
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